Saturday, August 22, 2009

Ending #1 to THE DOOR OF IMMORTALITY



"Stop!" the boy pleaded, now sounding alarmed like there was nothing he could do to stop her. "Don't go in, mom!"
Marijka paused from pulling the door open. She tilted her head a little and asked, "What?"
The boy was silent, and Marijka shuddered as the melody came on her hard, tinkling a depressing tune as to lure her in. She turned all the way around to meet the boy's cautious stare.


"What did you just say?" Marijka asked again. The boy's expression turned from cautious to horrified at what he had just said.
"I said, don't go in.. please." The boy stared at her with such sadness that Marijka began to pity him.
"And what will happen if I do?"
The boy cast his gaze down and mumbled, "Then you will remember me. And I don't want you to remember me, because then he'll bring you here again and again... and you'll go through that door again and again trying to get out, then remembering again, and then you will go crazy and you won't come back anymore."
Marijka repeated the words over and over in her mind, not making any sense out of them. But nothing made sense here.
"I don't understand." she finally said. But she didn't stop to wait for him to explain more clearly. She turned back around and swung the door open.
The darkness was rich with something indescribable. It was completely silent now, and the blackness was pulling her in. She felt she desperately had to go in.
And she did.

Marijka sat bolt upright, her eyes adjusting in her dimly lit, black cascaded bedroom. Her husband still wasn't home yet, but she didn't blame him. She knew he was going through a rougher time than she was. He was closer to Ryan.
Ryan.
Suddenly her dream came back to her, and she screamed. Pulling on a bathrobe that she had dyed black since the death of her son, Marijka ran out of the house and down the street, to the cemetary across from the playground.
There, in the far back, was a small headstone inscripted with Ryan's name, date of birth, and the day that he died. She fell to her knees and clutched the rock as if it would bring her closer to him. She didn't know what her dream meant, because she was slowly becoming insane.
No wonder that melody seemed familiar. She had been there before... numerous times... looking for him. Looking for Ryan.
But she didn't want to go there again, because the dream scared her.
No matter what it meant, or how much sense it made, she didn't and wouldn't go back.
And she let go.

2 comments:

Unknown said...

its soooo much better with the ending-you could even make a longer story out of the plot it really was awesome!!!!!

Dirtius Wifius said...

I agree. Totally better.